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标题: Today in many countries, poeple hold bigger and more expensive wedding than before. Is it a positive or negative development?

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总体点评：本文作者从两个方面论证了考题的内容，观点基本清楚，论证大部分合理但是有些观点缺乏有效的证明；文章的段落划分基本合理，比较符合逻辑，但是有些段落内容啰嗦重复，有充字数的嫌疑，一些连接词使用有错误；文章的单词和语法使用没有导致读者误解的严重错误，但是在单词选择，标点与连词使用，词性选择等方面存在一些问题，请作者根据下文的详细批改注意改正；
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Recently, there is a tendency for young people to attach more importance to their wedding, and the number of costs cost of their wedding keeps rising alarmingly. Some people take the view that it is a normal phenomenon, while others advocate that is is a negative practice. （开头段最后一句话有些啰嗦废话的感觉，不如直接回答考题的问题，如：As for me, this is more of a negative development than a positive one.）

People who are in favor of the practice and think that younger generation should have a bigger wedding than the elder people as a consequence of social development（这部分显得非啰嗦而且偏离了考题的原意，考题问的是“人们花更多的钱在婚礼上且婚礼规模越来越大”是否积极现象，而不是“年轻一代是否因为社会进步而应该比老一代人有更大的婚礼” have some sound reasons. In the first place, the affordability is enhanced with the development of our living standard, and the cost of wedding is relatively affordable to many people. In the second place, a bigger wedding is essential necessary to youngsters, so that for（关联词错误） all of their relatives and friends, such as colleagues and classmates, could should have a chance to attend to their wedding. With the development of science and technology, there are larger numbers of means of communication, and (consequently 是副词，能够连接句子的只有连词) consequently young people have more friends and workmates than the older generation nowadays.

However, the other side of the coin voices its opposition, saying that their luxury luxurious weddings are too costly and expensively（啰嗦重复，而且expensive应该用形容词而不是副词）, so it is a drawback of our society. First of all, there are still a large number of people have having （双谓语）inadequate foods and medicines as a result of poverty, and the too expensive wedding simply do does not consider of that fact. Furthermore, a growing number of people keen on holding luxury wedding reveal nothing but vanity. The actions is are beneficial to the hotels, restaurants, rather than the couples and their friends.（最后这个观点缺乏论证）

Admittedly, there are merits to both arguments. From my own perspective, I would like to take a more balanced position. Younger generation should hold a wedding in accordance with their economic situation, not too big and not too small, and their parents should make efforts to teach them to abolish their vanity.