It is obvious that the problem has become a serious one worth concern. When we explore this problem, some integral factors emerge. In the very first place, sale of medicines business and doctors have made a fat profit on the medicines. What′s  more, the patient had been given additional medical expenses. In addition, it was not standardized that hospital fees and treatment.

　　The current problem, I hold the notion, should be solved immediately. In general, our government should play a key role in making relevant rules and stringing hospital management and improving health services and building a harmonious relationship between doctor and patient.

　　老师评语：得分9-10分

　　该文基本符合写作要求，内容较充实，论述及建议也较具有说服力。

　　但是存在部分语言使用错误，需要在今后的习作练习中加以重视。多从英语基本功着手。