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An recreasing number of people feed pets and also it brings more and more matters. It is really a hotly debated topic currently. People's attitudes differ sharply on this issue. Some hold positive view. They think it is helpful to take care of pets and they love the pets. While the other people hold the opposite view. In their opinion, pets may bring some bateria or some disease to human. Also they makes the enviorment dirty.

  Personally, i believe that both of them are partly true. Actually, pets are friends of human beings. They can accompany the lonely poeple and sometime they can help us.  Feeding pets alos show our living standard improved. On the other hand, we should bath them frequently so that their disease will not infect us.

  The fact of feeding pets will not disapear. We should not prohibit it. We are only to conduct the fact to develop to a good direction. For example,  hold some lecture to submit the knowledge or the noted issue.

  名师点评:分数10分。

  同学你好,该表达的内容你都包含了,但是在结构安排上存在问题,在第一段你就应该把自己的观点阐释清楚,否则你的第一段就没有意义,完全可以不要,你现在的安排跟题目要求不符。另外,文章中有太多的拼写错误,注意一些语法问题。只要注意这些细节问题,你的 文章会有很大提高的,加油啊!

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