When it comes to going to hospital, opinions differ from person to person. At the present time it is exisiting the problem about high expense of medicine and difficulty of seeing a doctor in China. This phenomenon puzzles common people at large.

　　What caused those problems? In the frist place ,some doctors draw in a red packet, which caused the high fee of medicine. Some expensive medicines are used in the clinic. In the second place, some medical equipment can’t catch up with the requirement. A great number of suffers focus on some hospitals. It is difficult to register the special doctor. All things are considered which reform of medical care in China.

　　My View on reform of medical care in China, that enhance the quality of hospitals and improve the equipment. It constitutes the change standard through country. Let suffers to hospital expediently.

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